more ch1 tweaks before looking at ch2

game/script/1.first-two-days-anon-meets-fang.rpy

@@ -696,18 +696,20 @@ label chapter_1:
     I "I wanted to flee.{w} Hide away.{w} Anything to avoid those judging eyes."
     pause .5
 
-    N "{cps=*0.4}Why did you transfer here?{/cps}"
+    N "{cps=*0.5}What was your old school like?{/cps}"
 
     #TODO: 2spooky?
     play music 'audio/effects/menacing.ogg' fadein 0.5 # Attribution 3.0, LICENSE updated
 
     show dimmer_darker behind anon with Dissolve(1)
 
-    I "My throat clenches.{w} It’s an innocent question.{w=0.5} But I think back again to it all."
+    I "My throat clenches.{w} I think back again to it all."
 
     A "uh{cps=*0.2}...{/cps}{w=0.4} I{cps=*0.2}...{/cps}"
 
-    I "There’s whispers now.{w} The hushed tones,{w=0.4} silenced snickers,{w=0.4} blending with the everpresent stares.{w} My heart hammers at my chest and I am sure that they all can hear it.{w=0.5} See the cold chill racing over me."
+    I "There’s whispers now.{w} The hushed tones,{w=0.3} silenced snickers,{w=0.3} blending with the everpresent stares."
+    
+    I "My heart hammers at my chest and I am sure that they all can hear it.{w=0.5} See the cold chill racing over me."
 
     show dimmer_darker behind anon, jinflip with dissolve
 
@@ -728,7 +730,7 @@ label chapter_1:
     with ease
 
     Tsuki "{cps=*0.6}Puriizu retaano tsu yo shiito,{w=0.3} Anon-kun.{w=0.5} {i}Hai{/i},{w=0.3} nao curassu-{/cps}"
-    pause 0.5
+    pause 0.75
 
     I "{cps=*0.5}That was nothing like my Japanese animes.{/cps}"
     pause 0.5
@@ -824,6 +826,7 @@ label chapter_1:
     Nas "Wanna sit with Naomi and me?{w=0.7} Since you’re new and all."
 
     I "He points to a table where the living pink sugar rush is waving."
+    pause .5
 
     I "God damn it."
 
@@ -834,7 +837,6 @@ label chapter_1:
     #TODO: music variation
     stop ambient fadeout 0.25
     play music 'audio/OST/Dragging on and on....ogg'
-
     scene cafeteria
     show anon neutral at aleft
     show naomi neutral flip at sright
@@ -896,7 +898,7 @@ label chapter_1:
     # "I perk up at Naser’s interjection. Naomi looks disappointed for a second."
 
     # A "Not really,{w=0.4} just had to sign up for some handouts."
-    A "Not really,{w=0.4} just have to sign up for some handouts."
+    A "Not really,{w=0.4} just got to sign up for some handouts."
 
     show naomi sad flip with dissolve
 
@@ -952,6 +954,7 @@ label chapter_1:
     N "I know some great vegan shops in the area!"
 
     I "My stomach roils at the V-word."
+    pause .5
 
     A "{cps=*0.25}Maaaaybe{/cps} another time,{w=0.2} sorry.{w=0.6} So about that concert Naser?"
 
@@ -989,6 +992,7 @@ label chapter_1:
     I "I look at my pizza,{w=0.3} noticing something is wrong."
 
     I "I test it with my plastic spork and watch the cheap utensil shatter to bits."
+    pause .5
 
     I "I curse life for a third time today."
 
@@ -1002,6 +1006,9 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     Nas "But it’s my sandwich!"
 
+    show naomi:
+        ease 0.25 yalign 0.05
+        ease 0.25 yalign 0.0
     N "It’s fine,{w=0.3} we can split my vegan TLT!"
 
     show naser sad flip with dissolve
@@ -1034,6 +1041,7 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     I "..."
 
+    stop music fadeout 1
     scene black with fade
 
     I "{cps=*0.2}--After school--{/cps}"
@@ -1051,6 +1059,7 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     I "All that’s left for today is the concert.{w=0.5} And dinner."
 
+    play music 'audio/OST/to_swagger.ogg' fadein 1
     scene door auditorium
     show naser neutral:
         xalign 0.0 yalign 0.1
@@ -1157,6 +1166,7 @@ label chapter_1:
     play music 'audio/OST/we just turned on the microphone in our programmers_ house.ogg'
 
     unknown "Wait.{fast}"
+    pause 0.6
 
     I "His massive hand stops me."
 
@@ -1183,6 +1193,7 @@ label chapter_1:
     show spears happy
 
     Sp "You can thank your classmates for that."
+    pause .5
 
     I "What?"
 
@@ -1191,6 +1202,7 @@ label chapter_1:
     Sp "Now,{w=0.3} go enjoy the show."
 
     A "Yes sir."
+    pause .5
 
     Sp "Oh,{w=0.4} I do need you to come by my office tomorrow for some paperwork."
 
@@ -1203,6 +1215,7 @@ label chapter_1:
     show naser neutral at nleft
     with fade
 
+    play music 'audio/OST/to_swagger.ogg' fadein 1
     play ambient 'audio/effects/chatter loop.ogg' fadein 1.0
 
     I "Naser leads me and the large crowd into the shitty school theater."
@@ -1264,6 +1277,7 @@ label chapter_1:
     I "Everyone seems to share the same sentiment."
 
     I "So why the hell did they even show up for this?"
+    pause .6
 
     I "Naser finally comes back and opens the door to the main hall."
 
@@ -1272,8 +1286,9 @@ label chapter_1:
     I "The crowd moves in,{w=0.3} though I hang back so I can talk with Naser."
 
     show naser neutral at ncenter with dissolve
+    pause .5
 
-    A "What’s with them,{w=0.1} Naser?"
+    A "What’s with them,{w=0.2} Naser?"
 
     Nas "What do you mean?"
 
@@ -1319,7 +1334,7 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     Nas "{cps=*0.5}I brought them here so Fang has an audience.{/cps}"
 
-    stop music
+    stop music fadeout 0.5
     pause 1
 
     A "Oh."
@@ -1347,6 +1362,7 @@ label chapter_1:
     pause 0.7
 
     I "The voice on the other end is loud and shrill."
+    pause .5
 
     Nas "Yeah{w=0.2} I-{w=0.5}{nw}"
 
@@ -1357,6 +1373,7 @@ label chapter_1:
     pause 0.7
 
     I "He holds the phone away from his ear to save his eardrum."
+    pause .5
 
     Nas "Okay okay I-"
 
@@ -1370,16 +1387,20 @@ label chapter_1:
     A "Seriously?"
 
     Nas "Yeah,{w=0.3} Fang doesn’t want me here.{w=0.6} Said I’ll ruin the show."
+    pause .5
 
     I "Harsh."
+    pause .5
 
     show naser neutral with Dissolve(0.25)
 
     Nas "Look,{w=0.5} whatever happens{w=0.3} promise you won’t hold this against them."
 
     Nas "They're actually a really a nice person once you get to know them"
+    pause 0.6
 
     A "Naser why did you just murder the english language in cold blood?"
+    pause .5
 
     I "Within I see the rest of the audience,{w=0.3} huddled in groups around tiny snack tables."
 
@@ -1459,8 +1480,9 @@ label chapter_1:
     pause 0.7
 
     stop ambient fadeout 1
-    stop music fadeout 2
+    stop music fadeout 3
     unknown "{cps=*0.5}PFFFT AHAHAHA{/cps}{w=0.5} THEY STILL FUCKING SUCK!!"
+    pause 1
 
     play music 'audio/ost/Many Such Cases Of Being So True.ogg'
     # TODO: find suitable jeering loop
@@ -1544,7 +1566,7 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     Sp "Anon.{fast}"
 
-    pause 0.5
+    pause 0.65
 
     I "{cps=*0.2}Oh fuck{/cps}"
 
@@ -1553,12 +1575,14 @@ label chapter_1:
     A "Yes sir?"
 
     I "He looks to the crowd and then to me."
+    pause .5
 
     Sp "I don’t want to hear about any of this come tomorrow."
 
     Sp "I expect some goddamned maturity from you,{w=0.3} Anon."
 
     Sp "You’ll be an adult once you graduate."
+    pause .5
 
     A "Uh{cps=*0.1}...{/cps}{w=0.3} Why me though?"
 
@@ -1718,11 +1742,12 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     I "{cps=*0.2}...{/cps}{w=0.2} Guess I gotta take it one day at a time."
 
-    show anon neutral at acenter with dissolve
+    show anon neutral at acenter with Dissolve(1)
 
-    I "Picking myself up, I slide into todays’ (and everydays’) clothes and pour myself a bowl of off-brand cereal I picked up the day before."
+    I "Picking myself up, I slide into todays’{w=0.2} (and everydays’){w=0.2} clothes{w=0.4} and pour myself a bowl of off-brand cereal I picked up the day before."
 
     I "My eyes scan over my phone while I shovel my sugary breakfast into my mouth."
+    pause .5
 
     I "*Scroll*{fast}"
 
@@ -1733,6 +1758,7 @@ label chapter_1:
     I "*Crunch*{fast}"
 
     I "Like a poorly oiled machine until it runs out of fuel with a noisy slurp."
+    pause .5
 
     I "Soon enough it's time to leave for school.{w=0.5} I grab my backpack and slide it over my shoulders.{w} I take my jacket off the hanger and"
 
@@ -1740,7 +1766,7 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     I "{cps=*0.1}...{/cps}"
 
-    I "I take off the backpack and put the jacket on.{fast}"
+    I "I take off the backpack and put the jacket on."
 
     stop music fadeout 1
     pause 1
@@ -1923,6 +1949,7 @@ label chapter_1:
         pause 0.4
         repeat
 
+    play sound 'audio/effects/punch.ogg'
     T "GET YOUR HANDS OFF ME!!" with vpunch
 
     Nas "Trish,{w=0.2} I’m not going to fight you again."
@@ -1960,7 +1987,8 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     T "Even if you weren’t trying to mess with Fang!"
 
-    T "Screw!{w=0.4} You!"
+    T "Screw!{w=0.5} You!"
+    pause .5
 
     I "She stomps off."
 
@@ -2042,14 +2070,17 @@ label chapter_1:
     I "Guess it’s to the principal’s office with me.{w=0.3} Again."
 
     I "And thinking about him makes me think about last night."
+    pause .5
 
     Sp "{cps=*0.6}{i}You are not the only person in the world.{/i}{/cps}"
+    pause .5
 
     I "Poor Naser,{w=0.3} man.{w=0.5} Just wanted to help his sister."
 
     I "But it’s not like he did anything wrong."
     pause 0.5
 
+    stop ambient fadeout 3
     play music 'audio/OST/Those Other Two Weirdos.ogg' volume 0.8 fadein 3
     scene hallway
     show naomi unimpressed at sleft
@@ -2068,14 +2099,16 @@ label chapter_1:
     show reed explanatory flip
 
     Re "Bro,{w=0.4} you’ve known I’m in a band for like,{w=0.4} a year now."
-    
+
-    pause 0.6
     show reed neutral flip
+    
+    pause 0.7
     show naomi angry:
         easein 0.25 xalign 0.1
     pause 0.25
 
-    N "No!{w=0.5} {cps=*.4}{i}Contra{/i}band!{/cps}{w=0.5} In your backpack!"
+    N "No!{w=0.6} {cps=*.4}{i}Contra{/i}band!{/cps}{w=0.5} In your backpack!"
+    pause .5
 
     Re "{cps=*0.2}Hmmm...{/cps}{w=0.4}{nw}"
     show reed explanatory flip
@@ -2086,13 +2119,19 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     I "Naomi facepalms,{w=0.4} or whatever counts as a facepalm with a snout."
 
+    show reed shocked flip
     show naomi angry:
         easein .25 xalign 0.45
 
+    play sound 'audio/effects/punch.ogg'
     N "Reed!{fast}{w=0.7} You have a bong in your backpack!" with vpunch
 
-    Re "{cps=*0.1}...{/cps}But we aren’t in Britain?"
+    show reed neutral flip with dissolve
+    Re "{cps=*0.1}...{/cps}{w=0.2}{nw}"
+    show reed explanatory flip
+    Re "...{fast} But we aren’t in Britain?"
 
+    show reed neutral flip
     show naomi unimpressed with Dissolve(.75)
 
     N "Ugh,{w=0.3} you’re impossible{cps=*0.1}...{/cps}"
@@ -2121,7 +2160,8 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     hide reed with easeoutright
 
-    stop music fadeout 1.5
+    stop music fadeout 3
+    play ambient 'audio/effects/school loop.ogg' fadein 2
     pause 1.5
 
     I "The fuck just happened?"
@@ -2180,7 +2220,7 @@ label chapter_1:
     A "How the fuck did I end up here?"
 
     pause 0.75
-    play music 'audio/ost/That Monochromatic Weirdo.ogg' fadein 0.5
+    play music 'audio/ost/protestra_punk.ogg' fadein 0.5
     show reed neutral:
         yalign 0.1 xalign 0.3
     with Dissolve(1)
@@ -2188,13 +2228,15 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     show reed explanatory
 
-    unknown "Don’t worry man,{w=0.3} it happens to new students all the time{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
+    unknown "Don’t worry man,{w=0.5} it happens to new students all the time{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
 
     show reed neutral
+    pause .5
 
     A "Wha-?"
 
     I "Some pink raptor smelling of very heavily burnt grass surprises me."
+    pause .5
 
     unknown "If you’re looking for the office you’re gonna wanna go thataway."
 
@@ -2202,9 +2244,9 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     show reed explanatory
 
-    unknown "Yeah,{w=0.3} no problem, man{cps=*0.1}...{/cps}"
+    unknown "Yeah,{w=0.3} no problem,{w=.2} man{cps=*0.1}...{/cps}"
 
-    unknown "I’m about to go myself,{w=0.2} but I forgot something in my locker."
+    unknown "I’m about to go myself,{w=0.3} but I forgot something in my locker."
 
     show reed neutral
 
@@ -2218,6 +2260,8 @@ label chapter_1:
     I "He walks off down another hallway."
 
     I "I should follow the directions he gave me."
+    stop music fadeout 3
+    pause 0.5
 
     I "Oh wait{cps=*0.1}...{/cps}"
 
@@ -2231,6 +2275,8 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     I "In front of the principals’ office is Naomi and some other chick,{w=0.3} engaged in a heated conversation."
 
+    stop ambient fadeout 1
+    play music 'audio/ost/That Monochromatic Weirdo.ogg' fadein 1
     show naomi unimpressed at scenter
     show trish unimpressed flip at sright
     with Dissolve(1)
@@ -2251,6 +2297,7 @@ label chapter_1:
     show trish angry flip with Dissolve(.25)
 
     T "Six!{w=0.5} {i}This{/i} is the seventh!"
+    pause .5
 
     N "Go ahead and fill out a form{w=0.2}{nw}"
     show naomi:
@@ -2264,22 +2311,25 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     N "It was illegible,{w=0.2} Trish.{w=0.5} You should work on your handwriting a bit."
 
+    play sound 'audio/effects/punch.ogg'
     T "{b}ARGH!{/b}" with vpunch
 
     show trish:
         easein 0.5 xalign 1.05
+    pause 0.75
 
-    T "I don’t have time for this,{w=0.3} I need to go track someone down."
+    T "I don’t have time for this,{w=0.5} I need to go track someone down."
 
-    show trish angry with Dissolve(.25)
+    show trish angry #with Dissolve(.25)
     hide trish with easeoutright
     pause 0.5
 
+    play ambient 'audio/effects/school loop.ogg' fadein 1
     stop music fadeout 1
 
     I "She stomps away,{w=0.3} leaving Naomi to deflate a bit."
 
-    pause 0.5
+    pause 0.65
 
     A "That anything important?"
 
@@ -2430,7 +2480,7 @@ label chapter_1:
     stop sound fadeout 1
     play music 'audio/OST/we just turned on the microphone in our programmers_ house.ogg' fadein 2
 
-    Sp "-dismissed Naomi.{w=0.5} And just to be absolutely clear,{w=0.3} Anon did ask you for this,{w=0.4} correct?"
+    Sp "-dismissed Naomi.{w=0.5} And just to be absolutely clear,{w=0.4} Anon did ask you for this,{w=0.4} correct?"
 
     show naomi explanatory
 
@@ -2440,7 +2490,7 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     show naomi neutral
 
-    pause 0.5
+    pause 0.65
 
     Sp "Anon?"
 
@@ -2602,10 +2652,11 @@ label chapter_1:
 
 
     I "Naser’s leaning against a set of lockers,{w=0.3} along with that guy from before."
+    pause .5
 
     I "The other one’s making a throat-slashing gesture,{w=0.3} waving a palm across his neck."
 
-    pause 0.5
+    pause 0.6
 
     A "Uhh{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=0.3} nothing important."
 
@@ -2622,9 +2673,9 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     show reed explanatory
 
-    unknown "So as I was saying,{w=0.1} bro{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
+    unknown "So as I was saying,{w=0.2} bro{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
 
-    unknown "BXR,{w=0.4} best tactic in the game,{w=0.2} y’know?"
+    unknown "BXR,{w=0.5} best tactic in the game,{w=0.2} y’know?"
 
     show reed neutral
     show naser considering flip
@@ -2632,9 +2683,9 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     Nas "Erm,{w=0.3} yeah{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=0.3} Makes sense,{w=0.2} I guess?"
 
-    show naser unimpressed flip
+    show naser unimpressed flip with dissolve
 
-    Nas "Anyways,{w=0.1} Reed.{w=0.5} I’m sorry for how things went last night,{w=0.4} {cps=*.7}I didn’t think those assholes would laugh at you.{/cps}"
+    Nas "Anyways,{w=0.2} Reed.{w=0.5} I’m sorry for how things went last night,{w=0.5} {cps=*.7}I didn’t think those assholes would laugh at you.{/cps}"
 
     stop ambient fadeout 0.5
     show dimmer_light behind anon, naser, reed with dissolve
@@ -2659,6 +2710,7 @@ label chapter_1:
     Re "Hell yeah,{w=0.2} man.{w=0.5} Nothin’ goin’ on in the Trish department at all."
 
     I "Reed suddenly reaches into his pocket and retrieves his phone,{w=0.3} tapping away at a shockingly long password."
+    pause .5
 
     show reed shocked:
         easein 0.2 xalign 0.65
@@ -2677,6 +2729,7 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     show naser neutral flip with dissolve
     Nas "Weird guy."
+    pause .5
 
     A "Uh,{w=0.3} Naser,{w=0.4} {cps=*.4}I actually wanted to talk to-{/cps}{nw}"
 
@@ -2702,6 +2755,7 @@ label chapter_1:
     Nas "Crap,{w=0.3} can’t miss my homeroom today."
 
     Nas "Sorry,{w=0.4} it’ll have to wait a bit."
+    pause .5
 
     A "It{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=0.5} no,{w=0.3} that’s fine."