Story Revision 13C FINAL

game/script/13C.fang-and-anon-go-to-beach-and-prom.rpy

@@ -2286,13 +2286,13 @@ label chapter_13C:
 
     A "Back to the mosh pits, meeting strange people, having fun, maybe going for that solo career I know you can achieve."
 
-    A "You should leave your options open while I'm gone."
+    A "..."
-
-    A "I don't want to hold you back or make you waste time waiting for me."
 
     show anon sad flip with dissolve
     A "...We might not even see each other again..."
 
+    A "I don't want to hold you back or make you waste time waiting for me."
+
     A "But...{w=0.5} I'll never forget you, Lucy..."
 
     show fang surprised with dissolve
@@ -2304,50 +2304,66 @@ label chapter_13C:
     #I hate google docs, this is “” a mistake
     Lucy "Fuck... that hurts like hell..."
 
-    Lucy "It's... I...."
+    Lucy "I’m the one who’s supposed to barge in and break us up!"
 
-    Lucy  "Damn it, Anon..."
+    Lucy "Not You..."
+
+    Lucy "But..."
 
     Lucy "..."
 
+    "She lets out a loud sigh."
+
+    Lucy "...I’ve never told this to anyone other than Trish...{w=0.5} but there was this guy I dated back in my freshman year."
+
+    Lucy "We only lasted a week though."
+
+    Lucy "Same with the next, and the one after..."
+
+    Lucy "..."
+
+    Lucy "I’ve never had a relationship that’s lasted more than a week..."
+
+    Lucy "Eventually, I gave up on dating..."
+
     show fang angry with dissolve
-    "Lucy grits her teeth in anger."
+    "She grits her teeth in anger."
 
-    Lucy "I'm sorry, about all my bullshit!"
+    Lucy "Every time, I fucked it all up by dumping my baggage, or by being some social retard!"
 
-    Lucy "Please! T-that’s… that’s not me anymore…"
+    "She covers her face with her hands."
 
-    Lucy "I can't go back to being that thing!"
+    Lucy "Anon...{w=0.5} never wanted to dump all my baggage on you..."
 
-    show fang surprised with dissolve
+    Lucy "It's wasn’t right!"
-    "My voice causes my girlfriend to flinch."
 
-    show anon behind fang:
+    #TODO: Choreography kino here
-        ease_cubic 0.5 xalign 0.4
+    "I move to place a hand on Lucy's shoulder."
-    "I move to place a hand on her shoulder."
-    show fang sad with dissolve
-    A "Lucy…"
 
-    "Lucy lets out a sigh."
+    A "Lucy...{w=0.5} It's okay..."
 
-    Lucy "Anon… {w=0.5}I wouldn't feel right going back to how I used to be."
+    A "You can let it all out."
+
+    "She takes a deep breath, then exhales."
 
     show fang anguish
     show anon concerned flip
     with dissolve
-    Lucy "It's not right."
+    Lucy "That thing I used to be... I never realized..."
 
-    Lucy "It was just a phase! I swear!"
+    Lucy "It was so humiliating!"
-
-    Lucy "I thought what I was doing was completely normal."
-
-    Lucy "It was so humiliating..."
 
     Lucy "Naser might have known... {w=0.5}and he suffered so much because of it..."
 
-    Lucy "I can't imagine just how much more my parents would've hated if I stuck to being... being..."
+    Lucy "I can't imagine just how much more my parents would've hated if they'd known the real truth."
 
-    Lucy "I don't even know who I used to be now."
+    Lucy "So just forget it."
+
+    Lucy "It was an obsession."
+
+    Lucy "One I was convinced would make me happy."
+
+    Lucy "But it was never meant to be."
 
     Lucy "I… {w=0.5}I was just an ungrateful bitch..."