https://git.snootgame.xyz/Cavemanon/SnootGame/issues/41#issuecomment-585

game/script/1.first-two-days-anon-meets-fang.rpy

@@ -6,7 +6,7 @@ image naomi silo shocked = im.MatrixColor("naomi/naomi shocked.png",im.matrix.br
 
 # Naser's position when helping Anon get up
 transform nmidright:
-   xalign 1.5 yalign 0.1
+   xalign 1.5 yalign 0.08
 
 # Naomi's position when handing the brochure to Anon
 transform scloserleft:
@@ -185,7 +185,7 @@ label chapter_1:
     I "On the side of the building is where I find sanctuary"
 
     stop music fadeout 1.0
-
+    ###maybe add some ambiance here?
     scene garden
     show anon neutral flip at scenter
     with fade
@@ -246,7 +246,7 @@ label chapter_1:
     I "I lay on the ground,{w=0.4} ass hurt from hitting jagged concrete and splintered wood."
 
     I "Thank god for jeans."
-
+    ###Maybe a good idea to have this song fade in, the silence from before clashes a bit. Though, I will hold off on implementing to see how the bench scene would feel with ambience.
     scene pathetic at Pan((0, 1031), (0, 0), 10.0) with dissolve
 
     play music 'audio/OST/Dragging on and on....ogg'
@@ -271,7 +271,9 @@ label chapter_1:
     with dissolve
 
     I "The hand tightens around my own and pulls roughly."
-
+    ###Naser moves up a bit here, is this intentional? Maybe make it a bit more subtle.
+    #changed to make it a bit more stubtle, but feel free to tweak as you please
+    #Documentation on MoveTransition : https://git.snootgame.xyz/Cavemanon/SnootGame/wiki/Tips#MoveTransition
     show naser neutral flip at nmidright with MoveTransition(0.5, time_warp=_ease_in_time_warp)
 
     show anon neutral at acenter with dissolve
@@ -473,6 +475,8 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     A "uh{cps=*0.2}...{/cps}{w=0.4} I{cps=*0.2}...{/cps}"
 
+    ###might be wise to make this more abrupt and maybe fade in some music too
+
     I "There’s whispers now.{w} The hushed tones,{w=0.4} silenced snickers,{w=0.4} blending with the everpresent stares.{w} My heart hammers at my chest and I am sure that they all can hear it.{w=0.5} See the cold chill racing over me."
 
     show dimmer_darker behind anon, jinflip with dissolve
@@ -544,6 +548,7 @@ label chapter_1:
     show anon fear flip:
         xzoom 1
 
+    ###Artists and Writers were hesitant about flipping with zoom last time I did it. Might want to make another version in case they don't approve
     I "Said disaster was a hand grabbing my shoulder and turning me about."
 
     I "My plate of pizza shaped cardboard threatened to smear across my shirt."
@@ -593,6 +598,7 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     A "{cps=*0.25}Suuuure{/cps}{cps=*0.1}..{/cps}"
 
+    ###Might be wise to pull out a different track. If you need more, our sound guy has plenty.
     stop ambient fadeout 0.25
     play music 'audio/OST/Dragging on and on....ogg'
 
@@ -702,10 +708,11 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     show naomi:
         easein 0.4 xalign 0.9
-
+    ###Naomi should change to her cheery expression quicker
-    N "Hey!{w=0.4} Don’t leave me out of the conversation!"
+    
-
     show naomi happy flip with dissolve
+    
+    N "Hey!{w=0.4} Don’t leave me out of the conversation!"
 
     N "How about I help you pick out some cheap food after school?"
 
@@ -955,6 +962,8 @@ label chapter_1:
     Sp "Oh,{w=0.4} I do need you to come by my office tomorrow for some paperwork."
 
     I "I nod and go back to the door where Naser is standing,{w=0.3} holding it open for the last of the audience to go inside."
+    ###Rock boing no longer plays in the auditorium
+    stop music fadeout 1.0
 
     scene auditorium
     show anon neutral flip at aright
@@ -1051,7 +1060,8 @@ label chapter_1:
     pause .5
 
     show naser at nleft with MoveTransition(0.4, time_warp=_ease_in_time_warp)
-    play sound "<from 0.2 to 2.0>audio/effects/Slam.ogg" volume 2.2
+    #play sound "<from 0.2 to 2.0>audio/effects/Slam.ogg" volume 2.2
+    play sound "<from 0.2 to 2.0>audio/effects/Slam.ogg" 
     show naser table hit behind anon with vpunch
     pause 0.5
 
@@ -1086,6 +1096,7 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     show naser considering with dissolve
 
+    ###Might wanna get a different ring tone
     play sound 'audio/OST/ringtone.ogg'
 
     I "Naser’s phone rings.{w=0.4} He moves aside to answer it."
@@ -1176,7 +1187,10 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     I "The band doesn’t bother introducing themselves."
 
-    play music 'audio/OST/The Hunt for more (You)s.ogg'
+    ###Here's the garbage that was supposed to play
+    #also im convinced link related is the inspiration of song related
+    #https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Pbe9DkMyL8k
+    play music 'audio/OST/its_the_piece_of_shit_you_asked_for.ogg'
 
     I "Instead the purple one begins plucking her bass."
 
@@ -1210,7 +1224,7 @@ label chapter_1:
     stop ambient fadeout 1
     unknown "{cps=*0.5}PFFFT AHAHAHA{/cps}{w=0.4} THEY STILL FUCKING SUCK!!"
 
-    play ambient 'audio/effects/chatter loop.ogg' volume 2 fadein 1
+    play ambient 'audio/effects/chatter loop.ogg' fadein 1.0
 
     #(In-CG insult layers)
     window hide
@@ -1266,7 +1280,8 @@ label chapter_1:
     #(In-CG insult layers)
 
     I "I watch as she grabs her bass and takes the arm of the purple one,{w=0.3} rushing off stage with the pink drummer."
-
+    ###stop le music, needs some fine tuning
+    stop music fadeout 3.0
     scene black with fade
 
     window hide
@@ -1279,7 +1294,8 @@ label chapter_1:
     I "Oh God I can’t take this,{w=0.3} I’m gonna grow a 6 pack from laughing so much,{w=0.5} I’m just gonna grab my pizza and leave"
 
     # play ambient fadeout 2.0
-    play ambient 'audio/effects/chatter loop.ogg' volume 1 fadeout 1.0 fadein 0.25
+    #play ambient 'audio/effects/chatter loop.ogg' volume 1 fadeout 1.0 fadein 0.25
+    play ambient 'audio/effects/chatter loop.ogg' fadeout 1.0 fadein 0.25
 
     scene auditorium
     show anon neutral flip at aright
@@ -1411,6 +1427,7 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     pause 0.5
 
+    ###Maybe a better alarm noise is needed
     play sound "audio/effects/Alarm.ogg"
 
     I "{cps=*20}*BLEEP*{w=0.7} *BLEEP*{w=0.7} *BLEEP*{w=0.7} *BLEEP*{w=0.7} *BLEEP*{w=0.7} *BLEEP*{/cps}"
@@ -1441,7 +1458,8 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     I "With practiced movements I execute a proper combat roll from bed,{w=0.4} tackling the floor and headbutting it into submission."
 
-    play sound "<from 0.2 to 2.0>audio/effects/Slam.ogg" volume 1.8
+    #play sound "<from 0.2 to 2.0>audio/effects/Slam.ogg" volume 1.8
+    play sound "<from 0.2 to 2.0>audio/effects/Slam.ogg"
 
     I "With practiced movements I execute a proper combat roll from bed, tackling the floor and headbutting it into submission.{fast}{w=0.6} My foe defeated,{w=0.3} I groan in victory." with vpunch
 
@@ -2129,7 +2147,8 @@ label chapter_1:
     pause 0.75
 
     stop music
-    play ambient '<from 0.1 to 0.7>audio/effects/tinnitus.wav' fadein 5 volume 0.25 # TODO: use Spears yell + tinnitus SFX
+    #play ambient '<from 0.1 to 0.7>audio/effects/tinnitus.ogg' fadein 5 volume 0.25 # TODO: use Spears yell + tinnitus SFX
+    play ambient '<from 0.1 to 0.7>audio/effects/tinnitus.ogg' fadein 5.0
 
     Sp "{b}NAOMI!!{/b}" with vpunch
 
@@ -2517,7 +2536,8 @@ label chapter_1:
 
     I "Looking around for a place to sit I see the aggravating creamsicle waving at me."
 
-    play music 'audio/OST/Summertime Synth.ogg' volume 0.65 fadein 0.05
+    #play music 'audio/OST/Summertime Synth.ogg' volume 0.65 fadein 0.05
+    play music 'audio/OST/Summertime Synth.ogg' fadein 0.05
 
     I "Next to her is Naser with a complicated expression."
 
@@ -2685,4 +2705,4 @@ label chapter_1:
     A "Yeah.{w=0.5} If you need any help Naser,{w=0.4} I owe ya for the pizza."
 
     # and CUT :^)
-    return
+    return