ch3 alterations from feedback

game/script/3.showing-up-at-band-practice-and-giving-feedback.rpy

@@ -465,7 +465,7 @@ label chapter_3:
     I "Naomi hovers over Naser,{w=.4} who currently has Gucci under his eyes."
     pause .5
 
-    Nas "So,{w=.3} I uh{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} Talked to the soccer team earlier."
+    Nas "So,{w=.3} I uh{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.3} talked to the soccer team earlier."
 
     Nas "They’re going to make the first game after all."
 
@@ -480,9 +480,9 @@ label chapter_3:
         ease 1.5 xalign 1.075
         repeat
 
-    Nas "I also{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.4} Got the L&L Club to finally take down their christmas decorations{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
+    Nas "I also{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.4} got the L&L Club to{w=.4} {cps=*.5}finally take down their{w=.3} christmas decorations{/cps}{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
 
-    Nas "So{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.4} The library’s clean again{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
+    Nas "So{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{w=.4} {cps=*.3}{size=-5}the library’s{/size}{size=-10} clean again...{/cps}{/size}"
     pause .5
 
     show naser:
@@ -592,13 +592,14 @@ label chapter_3:
     N "But from Anon?"
 
     A "But from me?"
+    pause .5
 
     I "Naser continues."
 
     Nas "I asked her what she was doing,{w=.4} and she just{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
 
     show naser unimpressed flip
-    Nas "Just says 'fuck off...',{w=.4} so I think 'maybe dad will help'."
+    Nas "Just says{w=.2} 'fuck off...',{w=.4} so I think 'maybe dad will help'."
 
     show naser sad flip
     Nas "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}He didn’t."
@@ -620,6 +621,8 @@ label chapter_3:
         easeout_quart 1 xalign 1.3 yalign -0.3
     pause .5
     hide naser with dissolve
+
+    show naomi shocked
     play sound 'audio/effects/anonHeadbutt.ogg'
     with vpunch
     stop sound fadeout 1
@@ -628,9 +631,10 @@ label chapter_3:
     I "There’s a rumbling snore and it’s clear that Naser has checked out."
 
     A "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}{cps=*.5}Riiiiiiiight{/cps}{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
-    pause .5
 
+    show naomi sad with dissolve
     I "Naomi looks distraught."
+    pause .5
 
     N "He’s always like this{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
 
@@ -682,7 +686,7 @@ label chapter_3:
 
     play sound 'audio/effects/slapstickPunch.ogg'
     I "GOOD LORD HE’S HEAVY." with vpunch
-    stop music fadeout 2
+    stop music fadeout 4
     pause .5
 
     N "Alright,{w=.4} the Nurses’ Office is down the main hall on the left side,{w=.4} near the front desk."
@@ -890,6 +894,10 @@ label chapter_3:
 
     stop music fadeout .25
     play sound 'audio/effects/slapstickPunch.ogg'
+    show dimmer_light:
+        alpha 0
+    show dimmer_light:
+        linear 0.25 alpha 1
     A "SHIT!" with vpunch
     pause .5
 
@@ -899,6 +907,7 @@ label chapter_3:
     pause .5
 
     I "Do I really want to pick it up and potentially face a harsh reality?"
+    pause .5
 
     I "{cps=*.5}Schrodingers’ crack.{/cps}"
 
@@ -910,15 +919,23 @@ label chapter_3:
     I "It’s the moment of truth."
     pause .5
 
+    show anonphone with easeinbottom
+    pause .5
+
     I "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}No cracks?"
     pause .5
 
+    hide dimmer_light with Dissolve(.25)
+    pause .25
+
     play music 'audio/OST/Fuck You I Like This Chick.ogg'
     I "Thank the Lord."
 
-    show fang happy at scenter with Dissolve(1)
+    show fang happy at scenter behind anonphone with Dissolve(1)
 
-    F "Yeah,{w=.3} you got lucky."
+    hide anonphone with easeoutbottom
+
+    F "Yeah,{w=.5} you got lucky."
     pause .5
 
     I "Fang has stopped playing and is throwing a small smirk my way."
@@ -1150,6 +1167,8 @@ label chapter_3:
 
     I "Oh."
 
+    show anon:
+        easein_back 1 xalign 0.25
     I "I step around her and grab the handle,{w=.4} pulling the door wide open."
     pause .5
 
@@ -1164,14 +1183,14 @@ label chapter_3:
 
     show fang neutral flip with Dissolve(.25)
     show fang neutral flip behind anon:
-        easeout 1 xalign 0.25
+        easeout 1 xalign 0.15
-    pause .4
+    pause .6
-    hide fang with dissolve
-    pause .25
 
     play sound 'audio/effects/slapstickBigPunch.ogg'
     show anon shocked:
         easein_elastic 0.5 yalign -0.05 xalign -0.3
+    show fang:
+        linear 0.25 xalign 0.15 alpha 0
     A "FUCK!" with vpunch
 
     F "Hurry up already."
@@ -1255,19 +1274,27 @@ label chapter_3:
     show jewlcase at truecenter:
         xanchor 0.5 yanchor 0.5
         xpos 0.5 ypos 0.5 zoom 0.3
-        linear 0.5 align (.15, .4) knot (0.25, 0.25) rotate 395
+        linear 0.4 align (.15, .4) knot (0.25, 0.25) rotate 395
-    show jewlcase behind dimmer_light with dissolve
+    show jewlcase behind dimmer_light with Dissolve(.4)
-    play sound 'audio/effects/slapstickPunch.ogg'
+    play sound 'audio/effects/anonDink.ogg'
     show anon:
-        easein_quart 0.25 xalign -0.3 #-0.275
+        easein_cubic 1 xalign -0.4
-        easein 0.25 xalign -0.275
+    # B: previous iteration of this animation commented out
+        # easein_quart 0.25 xalign -0.3 #-0.275
+        # easein 0.25 xalign -0.275
+    # show jewlcase:
+    #     easein_quart 0.25 xpos 0.14
+    #     easein 0.25 xpos 0.15
+    # pause 0.5
+    # show jewlcase:
+    #     easeout_cubic 0.5 ypos 1.1 rotate 445
     show jewlcase:
-        easein_quart 0.25 xpos 0.14
+        xpos .15 ypos .4
-        easein 0.25 xpos 0.15
+        linear 0.5 align (.3, 1.5) knot (0.25, 0.25) rotate 180
-    pause 0.5
+    pause .2
-    show jewlcase:
+    show anon sad flip with Dissolve(.25)
-        easeout_cubic 0.5 ypos 1.1 rotate 445
+    pause 1
-    pause 1.5
+    hide jewlcase
 
     show trish angry flip with Dissolve(.25)
     T "What the fuck?!"
@@ -1275,12 +1302,20 @@ label chapter_3:
     I "It strikes against my head with a dull *tonk* and lands on the ground in front of me."
     pause .5
 
-    show jewlcase:
+    show anon neutral with dissolve
-        xalign 0.5
+    pause .25
+    show anon:
+        easein 1 xalign -0.275
+    pause .5
+
+    # leet renpy hax
+    show jewlcase
     show dimmer_light behind jewlcase
     show fang behind jewlcase
     show trish behind jewlcase
     show reed behind jewlcase
+    hide jewlcase
+
     show jewlcase with easeinbottom:
         rotate 20 xalign 0.5 zoom 1.5 yalign 0.5
     show dimmer_light as xtra_dimmer behind jewlcase with Dissolve(.25)