rework ch11 Naser beats the hell out of Anon scene

game/script.rpy

@@ -335,6 +335,7 @@ image naomi keikaku flip = im.Flip("naomi/naomi keikaku.png", horizontal=True)
 image anon shrug flip = im.Flip("anon/emotive set/anon shrug.png", horizontal=True)
 image fang hug flip = im.Flip("fang/emotive set/fang hug.png", horizontal=True)
 image naser brooding flip = im.Flip("naser/naser brooding.png", horizontal=True) 
+image anon concerned flip = im.Flip("anon/base set/anon concerned.png", horizontal=True)
 
 # scene flips
 image moes pizza mirrored = im.Flip("backgrounds/moes pizza.jpg", horizontal=True)

game/script/11.school-assignment-and-route-lock.rpy

@@ -1,25 +1,28 @@
 label chapter_11:
+
+    play music 'audio/OST/to_swagger.ogg' fadein 1.0
     scene room anon day
-    show fang neutral at sleft
+    with Dissolve(1)
-    show anon neutral flip at acenter
+    pause .5
-    with fade
 
     "The next day I was about ready to get to school when Fang stopped me at the door."
-    play music 'audio/OST/to_swagger.ogg' fadein 1.0
 
     "I told her I felt fine, but when I crumbled after she poked my ribcage I decided she had a compelling argument to stay."
 
     "Fang and I ended up just watching movies and playing Xrox all day."
+    pause .5
 
     "I don’t think I’ve ever seen Fang this morose, though."
 
     "Didn’t want to pry too much, even if we’re dating now."
 
     "Although I have a distinct hunch it’s related to the band and Trish."
+    pause .5
 
-    scene outside school with fade
+    scene outside school 
-
     show anon neutral at acenter
+    with fade
+    pause .5
 
     "Today though, I bit my tongue through Fang’s chest-poke test and she let me go."
 
@@ -29,80 +32,122 @@ label chapter_11:
 
     "I know picking up her missed homework will cheer her right up."
 
-    "Now that I finally have some time to myself I can properly address something I’ve been meaning too."
+    "Now that I finally have some time to myself I can properly address something I’ve been meaning to."
+    pause .5
 
     "The alarms."
+    pause .5
 
     "{i}*ahem*{/i}"
 
+    play ambient 'audio/effects/alarmsirenloop.ogg' fadein .5
+    show dimmer_light behind anon with Dissolve(.25)
+
     "A GIRL IS STAYING IN MY HOUSE HOW DID THIS HAPPEN!"
+    pause .5
+    
+    stop ambient fadeout .5
+    hide dimmer_light with dissolve
+    pause .5
 
     "How did I go from never being in a relationship to having a chick sleep over in less than two days?!"
 
-    "Ohhhh fuck if anybody finds out…"
+    show anon sad with dissolve
+    "{cps=*.2}Ohhhh {/cps}fuck if anybody finds out{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
 
     "Fang’s Father, Naser, Trish, all collectively splattering me on a wall."
+    pause .5
 
     "It’s not like I can ask for advice, either!"
 
     "The only other people I can ask are all hopelessly single and probably living off government benefits!"
 
     "My heartbeat doing Fang’s chest poke test from the inside is a good indicator I need to calm the fuck down."
+    pause .5
 
-    "Just… get through today and check out some romance manga on the way home."
+    show anon neutral with dissolve
+    "Just{cps=*.1}...{/cps} get through today and check out some romance manga on the way home."
+    pause .5
 
+    stop music fadeout 4
+    play ambient 'audio/effects/school loop.ogg' fadein 3
     scene hallway 
+    show anon neutral:
+        yalign 0.1 xalign 0.7
+    with fade
+    pause .5
 
     "The school is as rowdy as ever."
 
     "Somehow, nobody confronts me about the events of two days ago."
+    pause .5
 
     "Man, the people here move on fast."
+    pause .5
 
     "Maybe I should take the side route, getting bumped would probably feel like getting gored."
 
     "It’s a roundabout way to reach my locker, but I got plenty of time."
-    stop music fadeout 1.0
+    pause .5
-
-    show naser angry at sleft with dissolve
-    show anon neutral flip at acenter with dissolve
 
     Nas "There you are!"
-    play music 'audio/OST/punk_revamp.ogg' fadein 1.0
 
+    show anon neutral flip with Dissolve(.25)
     "I turn to see Naser pushing through the crowd of students towards me."
 
     "At least I can talk to him about the whole situation."
 
     "Or ask him for advice as well on how to handle Fang."
+    pause .5
 
+    stop ambient fadeout 3
+    play music 'audio/OST/punk_revamp.ogg' fadein 1.0
     "Wait."
 
     "Naser’s sister, Fang."
+    pause .5
 
     "The Fang who skipped school and is spending the day at my apartment."
 
     "And never went home for the past two days."
+    pause .25
 
+    show anon concerned flip with Dissolve(.25)
     "Suddenly I feel like a fish being circled by a very Naser-shaped shark."
+
     "How do I even begin to explain to him?"
 
+    show naser angry:
+        yalign 0.1 xalign -0.8
+    show naser:
+        easein_cubic 1 xalign -0.4
+    with dissolve
+    pause .5
+
     A "Uh, h-hey, Naser. What’s-"
 
-    scene hallway
+    show naser:
-    show naser elbow at scenter
+        easeout_cubic 0.5 xalign 0.3
+    pause .5
+    hide anon
+    show naser elbow:
+        easein_elastic 0.75 xalign 1.1
+    with Dissolve(.15)
+    play sound 'audio/effects/tableslam.ogg'
+    with hpunch
 
     "Naser grabs me by the jacket and shoves me against the wall of lockers."
 
-    A "ARGH MY EVERYTHING!"
+    play sound 'audio/effects/slapstickpunch.ogg'
+    A "ARGH MY EVERYTHING!" with vpunch
 
-    Nas "Where the hell is Fang?"
+    Nas "{i}Where the hell is Fang?{/i}"
 
     A "Woah, hey! I can-"
 
     Nas "She ditched with you the other day and hasn’t come home since."
 
-    Nas "Do you know what I’ve had to put up with because of you? Everything you do with Fang is my fault for letting it happen!"
+    Nas "Do you know what I’ve had to put up with because of you? {i}Everything{/i} you do with Fang is {i}my fault{/i} for letting it happen!"
 
     Nas "You’re lucky she texted me yesterday, Dad was about ready to file a missing person report for her."
 
@@ -111,6 +156,7 @@ label chapter_11:
     Nas "You better, before I drag your ass home and make you tell it to my Dad instead."
 
     "The terrifying prospect is enough to make me pause."
+    pause .5
 
     A "Fang is staying at my apartment, but-"
 
@@ -119,49 +165,103 @@ label chapter_11:
     A "Let me finish! But it was her idea after I fucked up my chest during an express trip down the stairs."
 
     A "She wanted to make sure I was alright and wouldn’t take no for an answer."
+    pause .5
+
+    show naser angry:
+        easein_cubic 1 xalign 0.9
+    show anon sad flip:
+        yalign 0.1 xalign 1.4
+    with Dissolve(1)
+    pause .5
 
     "Naser sighs and releases my clothes, but the scowl stays on his face."
 
-    show naser angry at sleft
-    show anon neutral flip at acenter
-
     Nas "Is that all that happened, Anon?"
+    pause .5
 
     A "I mean, we played some video games but-"
 
     Nas "ALL that happened?"
 
     A "I don’t think- Oh. OH. We, uh, didn’t DO anything, if that’s what you mean."
+    pause .5
 
-    Nas "Mmmm..."
+    Nas "Mmmm{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
 
-    A "I swear! She couldn’t even kiss me because of the stupid bruise…"
+    A "I swear! She couldn’t even kiss me because of the stupid bruise{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
 
-    Nas "What?!"
+    play sound 'audio/effects/slapstickbigpunch.ogg'
+    show naser surprised:
+        easein_quart 1.5 xalign 0.8
+    Nas "What?!" with vpunch
 
+    show anon concerned flip behind naser with Dissolve(.25)
     "Oh look I’m getting shoved into my locker again."
 
+    show naser:
+        easeout_cubic 0.25 xalign 1.4
+    show naser angry with Dissolve(.25)
+    show naser:
+        easein_cubic 0.25 xalign 0.9
+    show anon fear flip:
+        easein_cubic 0.25 xalign 1.1
+    pause .25
+    hide anon
+    show naser elbow:
+        easein_elastic 0.5 xalign 1.1
+    play sound 'audio/effects/tableslam.ogg'
+    with hpunch
+    pause .5
+
     "I hiss in pain as Naser’s fists press me against the locker."
 
-    Nas "Why would Fang kiss you?! Anon I swear to Raptor Jesus-"
+    Nas "Why would Fang kiss you?! Anon I {i}swear to Raptor Jesus{/i}-"
-    hide anon
-    show naser elbow
 
     A "I told Fang I like her!"
+    pause .5
 
     "Shit, I said that out loud."
+    pause .5
 
-    show naser shocked with dissolve
+    show naser:
-    show anon neutral flip at aright
+        easein_cubic 1.5 xalign 0.8
+    show anon sad flip:
+        yalign 0.1 xalign 1.4
+    show naser shocked 
+    with Dissolve(.25)
+    pause .5
 
     "Naser freezes, and the color drains from his face."
+    pause .5
 
-    hide anon
+    show naser angry with dissolve:
-    show naser elbow
+        linear 0.05 xalign 0.7975
-
+        linear 0.05 xalign 0.8025
+        repeat
     "Then he shoves me back into the lockers as hard as he can."
 
-    A "FUCK!"
+    show naser:
+        easeout_cubic 0.5 xalign 1.4
+    pause .5
+    show naser:
+        easein_cubic 1 xalign 0.3
+    show anon fear flip behind naser:
+        easein_cubic 1 xalign 0.65
+    show dimmer_darker behind naser, anon with Dissolve(1)
+    pause .25
+    show naser:
+        easeout_back 1 xalign 2.5
+    show anon:
+        easeout_back 1 xalign 2.0
+    pause .5
+    hide anon
+    show dimmer_darker:
+        linear 0.25 alpha 0
+    show naser elbow:
+        easein_elastic 0.5 xalign 1.1
+    play sound 'audio/effects/slapsticksuperpunch.ogg'
+    A "FUCK!" with hpunch
+    pause .5
 
     "A few students start turning their heads."
 
@@ -170,81 +270,134 @@ label chapter_11:
     unknown "Hey, isn’t that the track team leader?"
 
     unknown "He’s beating on that loser from the presentation, right? Hilarious."
+    pause .5
+
+    show naser angry:
+        easein_cubic 1 xalign 0.9
+    show anon fear flip:
+        yalign 0.1 xalign 1.4
+    show anon:
+        easeout_cubic 1 yalign -1.5
+    with Dissolve(.5)
+    play sound 'audio/effects/slapstickwipe.ogg'
+    hide anon with dissolve
+    play sound 'audio/effects/anonheadbutt.ogg'
+    with vpunch
+
+    show naser:
+        pause .5
+        choice:
+            "naser brooding" with Dissolve(.15)
+        choice:
+            "naser angry" with Dissolve(.15)
+        choice:
+            "naser annoyed" with Dissolve(.15)
+        choice:
+            "naser sad" with Dissolve(.15)
+        choice:
+            "naser shocked" with Dissolve(.15)
+        repeat
 
     "I could visibly see Naser’s thoughts process on his face as he finally comprehends our current situation."
-    #--[/dev/non, have Naser’s facial expression change every half-second on this line]
+    show naser brooding:
-    show anon neutral flip at acenter
+        yalign 0.1
-    show naser shocked
+    with Dissolve(.15)
-    pause 0.5
+    pause .5
-    show naser smug
-    pause 0.5
-    show naser neutral
-    pause 0.5
-    show naser shocked
-    pause 0.5
-    show naser neutral
-    pause 0.5
-    show naser smug
-    pause 0.5
-    show naser shocked
-    pause 0.5
 
-    Nas "No, I…"
+    stop music fadeout 4
+    play ambient 'audio/effects/school loop.ogg' fadein 3
 
-    Nas "..."
+    show naser:
+        easein_cubic 1 xalign 0.5
+    show naser explanatory flip with Dissolve(.25)
     
-    hide naser with moveoutright
+    Nas "No, I{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
+    pause .5
+
+    show naser annoyed flip with dissolve
+    Nas "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
+    pause .5
+
+    show naser:
+        easeout_cubic 1 xalign -0.5
+    pause .5
+    hide naser with dissolve
+    pause .5
 
     "He regains control of his legs and hurriedly rushes through the crowd, pushing aside a few students."
-    play music 'audio/OST/intercept.ogg' fadein 1.0
 
     "One or two classmates glance at me again, then continue on their way."
+    pause .5
 
     "While I’m checking for any more broken bones my phone buzzes."
 
-    show anonphone at scenter with moveinbottom
+    stop ambient fadeout 3
+    play music 'audio/OST/intercept.ogg' fadein 1.0
+    show anonphone at scenter with easeinbottom
+    pause .5
 
-    "{i}Fang: Anyone beat you up yet :V{/i}"
+    "{i}Fang:{/i}{fast} Anyone beat you up yet :V"
+    pause .5
 
-    "Uhhhhhhhhhhhhhh…"
+    "Uhhhhhhhhhhhhhh{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
+    pause .5
 
-    "{i}Anon: No. On an unrelated matter, have you spoken with Naser recently?{/i}"
+    "{i}Anon:{/i}{fast} No. On an unrelated matter, have you spoken with Naser recently?"
 
-    "{i}Fang: Told him i was staying here yesterday but havent checked his responses{/i}"
+    "{i}Fang:{/i}{fast} Told him i was staying here yesterday but havent checked his responses"
+    pause .5
 
-    "{i}Fang: Why do i need to kill him or something <:V{/i}"
+    "{i}Fang:{/i}{fast} Why do i need to kill him or something <:V"
+    pause .5
 
-    "{i}Anon: Not yet. Just thinking it might be a good idea to get in touch with him when you feel like it.{/i}"
+    "{i}Anon:{/i} Not yet. Just thinking it might be a good idea to get in touch with him when you feel like it."
+    pause .5
 
-    "{i}Fang: I might feel like it after i stop raiding your fridge{/i}"
+    "{i}Fang:{/i} I might feel like it after i stop raiding your fridge"
 
-    "{i}Anon: Die.{/i}"
+    "{i}Anon:{/i} Die."
 
-    "{i}Fang: >:V{/i}"
+    "{i}Fang:{/i} >:V"
+    pause .5
 
-    hide anonphone with moveouttop
+    hide anonphone with easeoutbottom
 
     "Glad to know she’s still holding up."
+    pause .5
 
     "Shit, now I’m not gonna have enough soda to last the week."
 
     "I’ll worry about that when I get home."
-    scene black with fade
+    pause .5
-    stop music fadeout 1.0
 
-    label naserDrama:
+    stop music fadeout 4
+    scene black with Dissolve(1)
+    pause .5
 
-    "..."
+    "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}"
-
+    pause .5
-    scene black with fade
 
     #Naser Drama
     #THIS SECTION IS SCORE DEPENDENT
-
+    # B: condensed this if-else block for readability
     if anonscore >= 4 and fangscore >= 4:
+        jump .SortingThings
+    elif anonscore >= 3 and fangscore <= 3:
+        jump .MendingThings
+    elif anonscore <= 2 and fangscore <= 2:
+        jump .BreakingThings
+    else:
+        jump .PromAnnouncement
+
     #Sorting Things
-       scene hallway with fade
+    label .SortingThings:
-       show anon neutral at acenter with dissolve
+        
+        play ambient 'audio/effects/school loop.ogg' fadein 3
+        scene hallway 
+        show anon neutral at acenter
+        with dissolve
+        pause .5
+
         "Today needs to end. Now."
 
         "I have a backpack full of missed assignments, including Mr. Tsuki’s essay on the history of typefaces."
@@ -266,20 +419,28 @@ label chapter_11:
         "And I have no idea what to do with a fucking girlfriend. All those hours of dating simulators have not adequately simulated dating in the least."
 
         "Just as I exit the main doors of Volcano High my phone buzzes against one particularly bad bruise on my leg."
-       show anonphone at center with moveinbottom
+
         "Fingers crossed it’s Fang."
+        pause .5
 
-       "{i}Naser  We need to talk{/i}"
+        "{i}Naser:{/i}{fast} We need to talk"
+        pause .5
 
-       "{i}Naser  Meet me in the auditorium{/i}"
+        "{i}Naser:{/i}{fast} Meet me in the auditorium"
+        pause .5 
 
+        show anon sad with Dissolve(.25)
         "I’m going to die."
-       hide anonphone with moveoutbottom
-       unknown "You’re gonna die weeb! Naser’s looking for your weeb ass!"
 
-       "... Best to get it over with now."
+        unknown "You’re gonna die weeb! Naser’s looking for your weeb ass!"
+        pause .5
+
+        show anon neutral with dissolve
+        "{cps=*.1}...{/cps}Best to get it over with now."
 
         "I meander my way to the school’s auditorium."
+        pause .5
+
         play music "audio/OST/The Hunt for more (You)s.ogg" fadein 1.0
         scene auditorium
         show anon neutral at aleft
@@ -1102,8 +1263,9 @@ label chapter_11:
 
         "..."
 
-    elif anonscore >= 3 and fangscore <= 3:
     #Mending Things
+    label .MendingThings:
+
         scene hallway with fade
         show anon neutral at acenter with dissolve
         "Today needs to end. Now."
@@ -1703,11 +1865,15 @@ label chapter_11:
         "But Rosa noticed me, judging by her waving hand and overly cheerful smile."
 
         menu:
+
             "Guess I’ll say hi.":
+
                 "I’m not in a great mood today, but I should still say hi."
 
                 A "Good morning, Stella. Morning, Rosa."
+                
             "Don’t want to talk to them today.":
+
                 "Really don’t want to put up with Stella’s overly positive attitude today."
 
         show stella neutral flip at scenter
@@ -2802,8 +2968,9 @@ label chapter_11:
 
         "..."
 
-    elif anonscore <= 2 and fangscore <= 2:
     #Breaking Things
+    label .BreakingThings:
+
         scene hallway with fade
         show anon neutral at acenter with dissolve
         "Today needs to end. Now."
@@ -3061,17 +3228,19 @@ label chapter_11:
         "..."
         scene black with fade
         stop music fadeout 1.0
-    else:
+
-      #>>Doomer, no naser
-      "..."
     #Anouncement
-    label endingFigure:
+    label .PromAnnouncement:
     play music 'audio/OST/to_swagger.ogg' fadein 1.0
+
     "April first."
+
     "Fang and I have been together for a month now."
+
     if anonscore >= 3 and fangscore <= 4: #tradwife
-        label tradwife:
+        # B: this flag should probably be set in the top level script instead
         $ tradwife = True
+
         "Things are going pretty well. When we discount Trish’s weekly attempt to talk with Fang."
 
         "Rosa and Stella have helped with that."
@@ -3101,6 +3270,7 @@ label chapter_11:
     with fade
 
     A "Hey Sweet Tooth."
+
     show fang considering flip at sright
     "Fang groans at the pet name. Honestly that hurt me to say too."